The voice of the narrator is clear and easy to relate to in this story.
I like the development of family and their home that includes the neighbor kids and animals.
The use of questions in the story is compelling. There were several instances where Cheryl asked the audience if they had had a similar experience. This draws the listener in to the story. Example: When Cheryl asks the audience if they have ever heard of "planting fish?" Another example was when she asked if "we" thought cheese might make a good bait to catch fish?
I love the use of description throughout the story. When Cheryl speaks of the buckets containing the fish seeming "almost alive" with the flipping and flopping of the fish, I got a visual image of the fish moving in the buckets. I also liked her description of the fish being "so
happy" when they are released into the creek and have their freedom. I imagine the fish jumping for joy in the water.
Suggestion: I would like to hear a little more description of the children trying to catch the fish with their bare hands. Perhaps, the fish could "slip or slide" out of their hands.
I was hooked! I enjoyed hearing Cheryl's story, and wondered what would happen next on several occasions in the tale. Great work!
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FISHING AT THE CREEK ~ VIDEO Fishing at the Creek YouTube Video
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